Re: [請益] 對跳場景該如何編寫？

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※ 引述《vitte (天堂咫尺可及)》之銘言： : 請問各位創作同好： : 我們通常被教導"單一場次情節須於單一場景內發生" : 凡是場景一更換　就要進入下一場次 : 但是 : 若面對「打電話情節」或者「A/B時空同時進行情節」 : 究竟該如何處理？沒什麼特別的寫法，就用簡單的文字說明，讓劇組了解就好：如：在三角形後寫一句，多景順剪以下場景： A. 管線 / 日 - 人物：ETHAN 與 KRIEGER B. 電腦室 / 日 - 人物：分析師然後開始寫劇本時，在每個三角形後，註明A或B, 或直接把管線：或電腦室：寫進去就好了～ : 例如： : 電影【不可能的任務】 : 常常會出現　夥伴在箱型車上看監視器、下指令 : 阿湯哥在大樓裡戴耳機聽指令　躲避敵人兼不斷挺進的狀況 : 這兩個時序同時併進　但空間卻相隔兩地 : 可能箱型車同伴下兩句指定　阿湯哥就跑兩步遇到一個狀況 : 阿湯哥打一打殺一殺後　箱型車同伴又繼續給予指示 : 請問這種場景不斷對跳的場面 : 劇本究竟該怎麼寫？？ : 難道我可以在場景說明時 : 直接寫「場景：箱型車內（夥伴）+CIA大樓樓梯間（阿湯哥）」嗎？ : 還是每個單一場景都要分開寫？ : 懇請知情者指正 : 感激不盡！你提到了不可能的任務，何不看看人家怎麼寫？ http://www.imsdb.com/scripts/Mission-Impossible.html 它沒分段/分頁/分場次，請 ctrl+F 找到第一個關鍵字：RAT（老鼠）我們來看看經典的偷密碼戰在劇本裡是怎麼寫的～這場戲從尚雷諾在管道間裡看到老鼠開始：有四個場景：管道 Duct 電腦室 Computer Room 救火車 Fire Truck 男廁所 Men's 切換場景，無論那場戲是不是單鏡頭，編劇也只是寫：INT. （反正導演自己會剪) 滴汗那場戲，他只也只是加了 -- 而已～人物：Krieger / 尚雷諾 Ethan / 阿湯哥 Luther / 黑人電腦專家　　　TECHNICIAN / 一直在吐的白人電腦管理員（CIA ANALYST） ========== INT. DUCT - DAY KRIEGER shakes with the strain of holding the rope. His eyes suddenly widen as he sees something next to him. It's a rat. KRIEGER stares. The rat stares back. Neither moves. Puzzled by KRIEGER'S lack of response, the rat crawls forward, inquisitive. KRIEGER's eyes water, his nose twitches. He's about to sneeze. INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY LUTHER pulls himself together and WHISPERS another command into the microphone. LUTHER You've done it. Eject it. INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY The 3.5 disk is ejected from the floppy drive. ETHAN pockets it and signals to be raised. Slowly, his body starts to move up. As it does, a bead of sweat rolls down his nose, balling at the tip. ETHAN ignores it. But below him, he sees the floor tiles, four of them lit up under the wheels of the chair at the computer terminal. His eyes widen as he realizes something -- --the drop of sweat falls -- --and he catches it with his right hand. INT. CIA - MEN'S - DAY CIA ANALYST crosses corridor from restricted access door to bathroom. A toilet FLUSHES, smashing the silence, and the TECHNICIAN staggers out of the bathroom. He goes to the sink and throws some water on his face. He's still unaware of the piece of shiny metallic tape stuck to his shoulder blade. He walks out of the bathroom, crosses corridor to door. INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY On one of LUTHER'S laptops, the blinking cursor starts to move down a corridor. LUTHER speaks into his microphone. LUTHER He's rolling. Get moving! INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY ETHAN is near the ceiling, but KRIEGER isn't pulling any more. ETHAN looks up at him, wide-eyed and gestures to pull him up. KRIEGER shakes his head no. ETHAN gestures -- "WHAT?!" INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY The cursor is halfway across the screen. LUTHER Get out of there -- get out of there -- INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY ETHAN still dangles. Holding the rope with one hand, KRIEGER holds out his other, demanding something. He wants the disk. INT. CIA CORRIDOR/GUARD STATION - DAY The TECHNICIAN makes his way back down the corridor, toward the computer room. INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY The blinking cursor is near the edge of the screen and LUTHER is sweating. LUTHER He's at the vault - get moving! 1 yellow, 2 yellows...Toast! INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY ETHAN, still hanging upside down, has refused. KRIEGER demands again. INT. CORRIDOR/GUARD STATION - DAY The TECHNICIAN passes through the optometric scanner. INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY LUTHER You're not moving! INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY ETHAN is hoisted up. INT. FIRE TRUCK - DAY LUTHER Phew! (to himself) NOC list. INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY ETHAN has the diskette in his mouth. KRIEGER leans down and takes it. He drops the knife. KRIEGER Merci. ETHAN We're not outta here yet. INT. CIA - COMPUTER ANTEROOM - DAY The TECHNICIAN deactivates the alarm systems, swings the door open and comes back into the room. He turns to close the door behind him and in so doing just misses seeing ETHAN'S head as it is pulled back up into the ceiling. CUT TO: INT. DUCT - DAY ETHAN throws smoke cannisters and he and KRIEGER crawl frantically back through the duct, the way they came. INT. CIA LANGLEY - LOBBY - DAY CLAIRE walks quickly past the GUARDS in the reception area and out of the building. INT. CIA - COMPUTER ROOM - DAY The TECHNICIAN enters the room and shuts the door. He sees the knife, picks it up, looks at it and then puts it down. He resumes his work at the computer but when he punches up his program, something prints out on his screen. Its header: KEYSTROKE LOG -- FILE DOWNLOAD 11/18/95 9.58 AM And it goes on. The TECHNICIAN'S eyes widen in disbelief. He spins back in his chair and reaches for the nearest telephone. -- seek the truth, follow the lies. http://heimystudio.pixnet.net/blog 程見的創意工廠 -- ※ 發信站: 批踢踢實業坊(ptt.cc) ◆ From: 124.12.80.199